ext_115425 ([identity profile] serpentine85.livejournal.com) wrote in [personal profile] sgpr_fan 2009-03-02 08:29 am (UTC)

This is good. I like your characterization through action and how you've shown group dynamics in this one scene. It'll be interesting to see where you go from here-update soon :)
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